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This week we continued reading the text ‘Bear and Rabbit.’ We wrote setting descriptions and recapped on grammar skills and looked at the four different sentence types. Today you will have the opportunity to apply these skills to your writing.
Today’s English focus is:
Writing
Today is an opportunity to write and share your first paragraph of writing. Write your first paragraph in your yellow book and then type this up on the blog. I will give you feedback on your writing so far.
You can continue your writing in your yellow books. Once you have finished, read over and edit your work.
Tomorrow, a new blog will be posted for you to share your finished pieces. You may like to write this in your best handwriting with all of the corrections.
You can send a photo tomorrow of your finished writing pieces and I will add them to the gallery in tomorrow’s writing blog.
Skill: To write a postcard and include detailed description.
You may like to read over the text again HERE to remind yourself of the events that happened.
Top Tips Start with Dear Rabbit and Bear Write in first person: I, we Use description: Describe the places you have visited, what were they like, who did you meet? You might like to describe any friends you met along the way. Make sure you include lots of detail, just like you did when you wrote your setting descriptions on Monday! Include some different sentence types statements, questions, exclamations, commands in your writing.
Support
Click HERE for a word bank to support your descriptive writing.
You may like to use the different sentence openers below to help you.
Now it’s your turn!
You might like to plan your writing first by jotting down some ideas of places you visited/friends you met/vocabulary to include.
Remember to look at the top tips to make sure you include important features and lots of detailed description in your writing. I look forward to reading your first paragraph today and all of your writing tomorrow.
Dear Bear and Rabbit,
how are you? Two days ago I have arrived in Egypt! it took me over 20 days, but I am finally here. I have flown over Italy! Egypt is so much different than our forest. It is full of sand, people and other birds, which just like me escaped cold weather (and beavers!).
I miss you so much but I’m having such a lovely time down here south. I met a lady woodpecker, she had beautiful silk red feathers! And a lovely shiny beak! She said her name was Lady Woodpecker. We had love at first sight! We walked to the beach ?and I had a sunburn!! Owwwwcccchhhhhyyyyy! I ran as fast as I could into the water and I saw…A LOBSTER ???!! I screamed HEEELP!! then the Lobster snapped me with his Claws YIKES!! He did it again DOUBLE YIKES!! I tried to bite him back and he said “back off!” In a muffled voice “your sitting on me!!” I stepped to the side oh ummm I’m very sorry I said. He took off the dust and suddenly he sneezed ? Aa Aa Aa ACHOOOO! I and Lady Woodpecker flew away along with the sand, right now I’m having a nap in a nice tree with Lady Woodpecker.
A great postcard Clemence, you have included lots of information about your trip! You might like to read over your writing and add in some description about the beach and what it was like there! 🙂
Dear rabbit and bear
Here in the South, we have lots of fun everyday. Everyone can play including me. Hopefully I won’t be cold but anyway there’s no chance because it’s really really hot here ! The good news is that for the winter, some other kind of birds made me a brand new nest ! We always sunbathe, here it’s as hot as a desert and the sun always shines. It’s so perfect here ! Sadly I can go flying with the other birds but I’m sure my feathers will grow back soon. Hope you’re ok and you get your honey every day .
Love from Woodpecker xx
PS : I miss you .
On the way to the south I met a friend and we soon got into a conversation about the journey and how nice the south is. I took many pauses along the way close to lakes so that I could eat.
Dear Bear and Rabbit,
I had such a scary day. I was flying over the sea, it felt as if I had flown 8 trillion kilometres! I was VERY tired, I fell asleep but my wings were still open and I was only gliding. I was losing height quickly. Suddenly I opened my eyes halfway, my wing was skimming the water. In the distance I saw two strange looking birds, one with an unusual looking beak and the other with weird shaped wings.
They swooped down! The first one to catch me was the one with the weird looking beak, then the one with the odd wings said: “that’s MY flying fish!” the other said :”this tastes weird” and he spat me out.
I think he realised I was a woodpecker and didn’t like the last of me.
He was wearing glasses, so maybe he was shortsighted.
The odd couple introduced themselves, Albert Albatross and Peter Pelican. I will have to tell you about them next time…
I can’t fit it all in on just one post card!
A brilliant postcard Sebastian, I love how you added in suspense to your writing! I was worried about the Woodpecker for a moment! You have included some lovely detail, well done.
Dear Bear + Rabbit,
I miss you two!It was a long but lovely journey to Ireland. It is a little rainy over here but a little rain can’t stop me going out and enjoying the beautiful beaches! It’s lovely and I wish you two were here.
I will write again soon.
Best wishes,
Woodpecker xxx
How are you? What news?? Any problems?!?!? Well I’ve met a beautiful Jay, she was so beautiful I fell out of the sky! Right now I’m trying to find out where I am! But I personally think I’m in a desert because it looks like a still sandy sea, probably the Shara since it is GIANT! Hope I can see you soon.
A good start Julian! As you continue your writing you may like to add in some more information about your travels, are you lost in the desert? How will you find your way back?
Dear Rabbit ando bear,
I wish you were here you were in south because it’s such a lovely time hear because it’s sunny and windy Here. I miss you. I Wish you are hear and what is the weather like ?
I will be witting you again
From woodpecker
Miss you xxx
Dear bear +rabbit
I am having a great time here in South.It was a long journey but I’m sill happy. You guys should come and there is more more fun.
I have met other different birds and I am making friends.
Best wishes
Woodpecker.
Great effort Celestine! You have added in lots of detail about your travels, I like how there are parties all the time! Remember to read over your work and check your punctuation.
When I flew south, I smelt sweet, rich and fresh air. I flew through many amazing and colorful countries. I saw many interesting monuments, beautiful forests and fields. When I flew south, I saw many different species of birds and animals. I met many friends. We ate blueberries from the berry tree. During the flight we talked about funny stories from our lives. I was very happy and had a great time, but we had to split up and go our own way.
In the south there were many different great parties where they danced and sang it was great fun.
The next event will take place in 8 days
I can not wait!
In Poland there are many different trees, some are very large and give a lot of shade, there are different shapes and colors. I found a very good one tree with a hole in it, so I decided it would be my holiday tree. I discovered that in Poland there are the most cheerful and fun parties for me.
Well done Karolina, a great effort! You have added some lovely details about your travels which were interesting to read!
In paragraph one remember to use conjunctions to expand on your sentences. For example I saw many interesting monuments like…
I saw beautiful forests and fields with…
🙂
Good effort Ethan, I like how you have included some questions in your writing to check in on your friends. Remember to describe the places you have been and who you have met along the way 🙂
Well done Eugenia, I like your postcard and the picture too! Remember to include places you have visited and what they were like, the more you describe the more interesting your writing will be. 🙂
Great effort Penelope, I like how the other bird made you a nest 🙂
Remember to describe these things, what was the nest like? What was the birds name? 🙂
Dear rabbit and bear
When I flew south I was thinking how much I’m going to miss you
guys. I hope you are well. The weather down south is really good for my feathers. I have made two new friends. They are two twin squirrels. They make me laugh so much that it makes me remember you two. Is there anymore chewed up trees being chewed off?. Please can you too help save me a new tree for when I get back. Hopefully soon.
Great effort Chloe H, it made me laugh when you said about the frog being an alarm clock! 🙂 As you continue, make sure you include some of the things you have done on your travels.
A good try Johnny, remember to read over your work to check it makes sense. You are writing a postcard to Bear and Rabbit to tell them about your travels.
Dear Bear and Rabbit,
how are you? Two days ago I have arrived in Egypt! it took me over 20 days, but I am finally here. I have flown over Italy! Egypt is so much different than our forest. It is full of sand, people and other birds, which just like me escaped cold weather (and beavers!).
A good start Helena! As you continue your writing, remember to describe Egypt and the spectacular sights!
Dear Bear and rabbit,
I miss you so much but I’m having such a lovely time down here south. I met a lady woodpecker, she had beautiful silk red feathers! And a lovely shiny beak! She said her name was Lady Woodpecker. We had love at first sight! We walked to the beach ?and I had a sunburn!! Owwwwcccchhhhhyyyyy! I ran as fast as I could into the water and I saw…A LOBSTER ???!! I screamed HEEELP!! then the Lobster snapped me with his Claws YIKES!! He did it again DOUBLE YIKES!! I tried to bite him back and he said “back off!” In a muffled voice “your sitting on me!!” I stepped to the side oh ummm I’m very sorry I said. He took off the dust and suddenly he sneezed ? Aa Aa Aa ACHOOOO! I and Lady Woodpecker flew away along with the sand, right now I’m having a nap in a nice tree with Lady Woodpecker.
I miss you!
From Woodpecker xxx
A great postcard Clemence, you have included lots of information about your trip! You might like to read over your writing and add in some description about the beach and what it was like there! 🙂
Dear rabbit and bear
Here in the South, we have lots of fun everyday. Everyone can play including me. Hopefully I won’t be cold but anyway there’s no chance because it’s really really hot here ! The good news is that for the winter, some other kind of birds made me a brand new nest ! We always sunbathe, here it’s as hot as a desert and the sun always shines. It’s so perfect here ! Sadly I can go flying with the other birds but I’m sure my feathers will grow back soon. Hope you’re ok and you get your honey every day .
Love from Woodpecker xx
PS : I miss you .
Well done Penelope! You have included a simile too! Remember to read over your writing and correct punctuation. 🙂
Hello Miss Jones.
Dear Bear and Rabbit,
On the way to the south I met a friend and we soon got into a conversation about the journey and how nice the south is. I took many pauses along the way close to lakes so that I could eat.
A good start Matthias, as you continue your writing include lots of description about the lakes you visited and other places you saw.
Dear Bear and Rabbit,
I had such a scary day. I was flying over the sea, it felt as if I had flown 8 trillion kilometres! I was VERY tired, I fell asleep but my wings were still open and I was only gliding. I was losing height quickly. Suddenly I opened my eyes halfway, my wing was skimming the water. In the distance I saw two strange looking birds, one with an unusual looking beak and the other with weird shaped wings.
They swooped down! The first one to catch me was the one with the weird looking beak, then the one with the odd wings said: “that’s MY flying fish!” the other said :”this tastes weird” and he spat me out.
I think he realised I was a woodpecker and didn’t like the last of me.
He was wearing glasses, so maybe he was shortsighted.
The odd couple introduced themselves, Albert Albatross and Peter Pelican. I will have to tell you about them next time…
I can’t fit it all in on just one post card!
From Woodpecker
A brilliant postcard Sebastian, I love how you added in suspense to your writing! I was worried about the Woodpecker for a moment! You have included some lovely detail, well done.
Dear Bear + Rabbit,
I miss you two!It was a long but lovely journey to Ireland. It is a little rainy over here but a little rain can’t stop me going out and enjoying the beautiful beaches! It’s lovely and I wish you two were here.
I will write again soon.
Best wishes,
Woodpecker xxx
A good start Ophelia, remember to include lots of description. What were the beaches like? Did you meet any other birds?
Dear Rabbit and Bear,
How are you? What news?? Any problems?!?!? Well I’ve met a beautiful Jay, she was so beautiful I fell out of the sky! Right now I’m trying to find out where I am! But I personally think I’m in a desert because it looks like a still sandy sea, probably the Shara since it is GIANT! Hope I can see you soon.
From Woodpecker
A good start Julian! As you continue your writing you may like to add in some more information about your travels, are you lost in the desert? How will you find your way back?
Dear Rabbit ando bear,
I wish you were here you were in south because it’s such a lovely time hear because it’s sunny and windy Here. I miss you. I Wish you are hear and what is the weather like ?
I will be witting you again
From woodpecker
Miss you xxx
A good effort Graceanne, remember to include lots of detail about what it is like there! Have you met any friends?
Dear bear +rabbit
I am having a great time here in South.It was a long journey but I’m sill happy. You guys should come and there is more more fun.
I have met other different birds and I am making friends.
Best wishes
Woodpecker.
Well done Gabriella, what is it like there? What have you been doing? Don’t forget to include those important things. 🙂
Great effort Celestine! You have added in lots of detail about your travels, I like how there are parties all the time! Remember to read over your work and check your punctuation.
Dear Rabbit and Bears
When I flew south, I smelt sweet, rich and fresh air. I flew through many amazing and colorful countries. I saw many interesting monuments, beautiful forests and fields. When I flew south, I saw many different species of birds and animals. I met many friends. We ate blueberries from the berry tree. During the flight we talked about funny stories from our lives. I was very happy and had a great time, but we had to split up and go our own way.
In the south there were many different great parties where they danced and sang it was great fun.
The next event will take place in 8 days
I can not wait!
In Poland there are many different trees, some are very large and give a lot of shade, there are different shapes and colors. I found a very good one tree with a hole in it, so I decided it would be my holiday tree. I discovered that in Poland there are the most cheerful and fun parties for me.
Well done Karolina, a great effort! You have added some lovely details about your travels which were interesting to read!
In paragraph one remember to use conjunctions to expand on your sentences. For example I saw many interesting monuments like…
I saw beautiful forests and fields with…
🙂
Hi Chloe K, please send through your writing again it is quite blurry so it’s tricky to read! Thank you.
Well done Emi, you have included lots of events in your writing. Remember to describe the setting in Africa, what did you see, how did you feel? 🙂
Good effort Ethan, I like how you have included some questions in your writing to check in on your friends. Remember to describe the places you have been and who you have met along the way 🙂
Well done Eugenia, I like your postcard and the picture too! Remember to include places you have visited and what they were like, the more you describe the more interesting your writing will be. 🙂
A good effort Louis, remember to include information about the places you have visited and what you have done on your travels.
Great effort Penelope, I like how the other bird made you a nest 🙂
Remember to describe these things, what was the nest like? What was the birds name? 🙂
Dear rabbit and bear
When I flew south I was thinking how much I’m going to miss you
guys. I hope you are well. The weather down south is really good for my feathers. I have made two new friends. They are two twin squirrels. They make me laugh so much that it makes me remember you two. Is there anymore chewed up trees being chewed off?. Please can you too help save me a new tree for when I get back. Hopefully soon.
Well done Jiana, some great ideas in your writing, remember to describe the places you have visited too 🙂
Great effort Chloe H, it made me laugh when you said about the frog being an alarm clock! 🙂 As you continue, make sure you include some of the things you have done on your travels.
Dear rabbit and Bear
When I flew south how much I will miss you
how you when the rabbit bit the tree down
I liked the part with the big rabbit.
A good try Johnny, remember to read over your work to check it makes sense. You are writing a postcard to Bear and Rabbit to tell them about your travels.