Good morning Year 1! I was very pleased to see so many of you write lots yesterday!
Today you will finish your writing if you haven’t already done so. You can take a picture of your writing, or type it into the box (if your fingers don’t get too tired)!
A reminder of your writing task:
I have started placing pictures of your writing in a gallery which you will be able to see – thank you to all of you who have sent photos in.
If you have finished your writing, think about these things and remember to read back your work!
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Have I read back my sentences to check that they make sense?
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Have I used capital letters and full stops?
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Have I tried to use the past tense verbs?
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Have I used my sounds?
Well done everyone for a brilliant week of learning! Have a lovely rest and ready to learn again on Monday.
I will tell you about my week. Every day, the Queen looked in her magic mirror.
On Monday, the mirror told her that she was the most beautiful.
On Tuesday, when the Queen looked in the mirror she was very angry because it told her that I was the most beautiful! She stamped her foot and told the huntsman to kill me in the woods.
But the huntsman did not kill me, but told me to run away and not ever come back to the castle! I was very scared in the dark forest.
On Wednesday, I was lost in the forest when I found a tiny house so I went to see what was inside! There was seven little doors and chairs, but it was very dirty so I did some cleaning and fell asleep. But the door opened… And there were seven surprised dwarves! I stayed to help clean.
On Thursday, the mirror told the Queen that I was alive, and found out that the huntsman tricked her! She dressed up as an old lady and found the tiny house in the forest to give me a poison apple.
The dwarves found me and found out I was dead! They took me to a mountain and gave me a white bed!
On Saturday, a Prince came and kissed me. This broke the spell, so I woke up! I was alive!
And we lived happily ever after.
Well done Flavia! An excellent piece of writing!
Hi Miss Travers! This is the story I made.
I will tell you about my week.
On Monday, the wicked queen asked the mirror and it told her that she is the fairest of them all. On Tuesday, the queen ? asked the mirror again and this time, it said that I am the fairest of them all. The queen ? was so angry when she heard that. She ordered the huntsman to kill me, but he asked me to ran away and hide in the forest instead. On Wednesday, while walking in the forest, I found a small cottage, I went inside then fell asleep. When I woke up, I was surrounded by seven dwarfs. I begged to let me stay with them. I cleaned and cooked for them. On Thursday, the queen found out from the mirror that I am still alive. She went to the forest , pretended to be an old lady to find me. I opened the door and took a bite from the apple the old lady gave me. I did know that is was a poisonous apple ?. Then,the dwarfs found me lying on the floor, dead.
On Saturday, a Prince came and woke me up with a kiss.
We lived happily ever after.
Super writing! You have got so good at writing Jaidee!
Dear Miss Travers, find below the end of my story:
I don’t know what happened on Thursday and Friday because I have been asleep. On Saturday a lovely prince woke me up with a lovely kiss. On Sunday he took me to his castle, Saying goodbye to the dwarfs was tricky but I’m sure we are going to meet again.
Well done Camila, you worked so hard on this!
Dear Miss Travers
I finished my story yesterday.
1st question:
Yes I read my sentence and I corrected some of them.
2nd question:
Yes I used capital Letters and full stops.
3rd question:
I have used the past tens verbs. Example, washed, wicked, whispered dreamed…
4th question:
I used lots I’d sounds.
Well done Fabi! That’s brilliant!!
Dear Miss Travers.
I am doing this again.
Dear Diary.
On Monday the Wicked Queen ? looked into her magic mirror and said “magic mirror on the who’s the fairest of them all?” And it said “You are the fairest of them all”.
On Tuesday she asked the magic mirror again and this time it said “Snow white is the fairest of them all” she became very angry.
On Wednesday I went into the Forest ? and then the huntsman found me and told me that the wicked Queen ?♀️ wanted to kill me, so I ran deep into the forest ? and then I fell asleep.
On Thursday I met some animals ? and they told me that there was a little cottage where I could stay and then I went to the cottage with the animals and it was very dirty, so we cleaned ? it and then I fell asleep again. I woke up and I saw 7 dwarfs and they told me their names and then they let me stay with them. We had some dinner and then we danced.
On Friday the dwarfs went to work and the wicked Queen finds out that I am still alive and living in the forest. She disguised herself as an old lady and she knocked on the door ? of the cottage and gave me a red poisonous apple. ? The dwarfs came back home and found me dead and they were really sad. ☹️
On Saturday A handsome prince ? rode on his horse ? into the forest ? and found me lying down and he saw the dwarfs crying,? so the prince kissed me ? and I woke up and he took me away to his castle ? to live happily ever after.
I will tell you about my week.
On Monday the queen whispered to the mirror and it always told the truth. On Tuesday the queen said to her soldiers to kill the princess! On Wednesday I saw seven dwarfs after that the seven dwarfs did a mess!
On Thursday I went to a beautiful castle! On Friday I saw a dinosaur that roared at me! On Saturday I saw Microraptor and a Amargasaurus. On Sunday I saw a Spinosaurus, Compsognathus and a Stygimoloch and I played with them forever. (I found dinosaurs names in my book and on Dino Dana series).