Good morning Year 6!
Today we’re going to do some writing! I’m so excited to see what you’re able to write.
Today you can write your opening sentence or first few sentences on the blog and then you will receive feedback which you can apply to your final published piece for tomorrow. Then you can finish your writing in your Home Learning Books, making sure you proof read and edit as you go!
Task:
Your brainstorm from Tuesday should help with this!
The first thing you need to do is consider how you will describe the toy in detail. Use your imagination and be as thorough as you can!
This might help: Amazing Adjectives and Awesome Adverbs
The key is to SHOW, NOT TELL. Show what the toy is like but don’t tell us what it is.
REMEMBER TO USE:
•Interesting verbs
•Adverbs – words that add information to the verb.
•Adjectives – describing words that tell you more about nouns.
CHALLENGE: Can you include a simile or metaphor? (If you click on the words, they will take you to BBC Bitesize for more examples)
You can describe the advert as if you are trying to sell it or it is missing or it is a new toy coming to stores soon. If you include pictures try to include just a part of the toy so that others can guess what it is!
Once you have completed your advert, please send it via the Homework Uploader for the attention of Miss Carruthers.
Extension: describe these objects to an alien.
You come across a small alien from the planet Mirocat.
He has never been to Earth before and explains to you that there are a lot of new things here he has never seen before. Could you help him by describing the objects as if they are brand new to you and you have never seen them before? Do not say what the object is!
You can write the descriptions in the comments and your classmates can guess what it is you are writing about!
As today is not my working day, Miss Carruthers will kindly respond to you on the blogs.
Good luck Year 6!
Mrs Avdiu xx
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Done
Well done! Do you want to share your start and then you can publish it tomorrow?
Can it be a doll?
Of course!
Dear Dolly
Have you ever wanted a doll with dozens of uses?Have you ever wondered when you would get your DREAM doll?Well,look no further because this is the perfect doll for you!our Limited eddtion Dear Dolly doll is only available for one week!It can talk to you when you are lonely,tell you jokes when you are sad,and even help you with your work!You could possibly even use it as your nanny!
Multi colour
This is also perfect for night-light sleepers.This magical wonder is a colour changing night light in rainbow colour!It also makes caliming sounds that can help children AND adults that find it hard to sleep such as:gentle water droplets:blue birds chrping and water splashing!
Brilliant Ariella!
🙂 You’ve used lots of adjectives to describe your doll.
T) When you’re typing, remember to put a space after each punctuation (, . ? !)
Here is my advert.
CERAMIC DOVE PENICIL HOLDER!!!!!
Do you ever need a pencil pot but it takes to much space?
Well you have come to the right place, we are selling a shaped pencil pot shaped like a dove. It does not take much space however it does carry a lot of pencils.
It is a really useful gift or present to receive from someone because of all the positive comments we have received. Guess what! These special doves are always going to be there waiting to be put pencils in and they were hand crafted and painted by volunteers especially for you.
Get them as soon as possible, half price now!!
I hope you enjoyed my advert, answer me if anything needs to be improved!
Well done Elly!
🙂 You’ve made it very exciting to read which makes the reader want to get one!
T) Maybe you could quote some of the positive comments?
My toy is a doll!
Hi Year 6! I hope that you have had a good day-I’m missing the sunshine! ☀ I enjoyed reading your adverts and I look forward to reading your finished pieces tomorrow. Xx