Good Morning Year 2!
Click here for a printable version of this blog post: Friday English printable
Looking at your work yesterday, your plans and the start of your stories were very exciting! I can’t wait to read the rest of them today!
Before you send in your work (either typed in the comments or a photo of your neatest handwriting), have another read through. It can be good to come back to it the next day with fresh eyes to see if our writing says what we want it to say!
Use the checklist on the story writing frame to make sure that your story is the best that it can be. It mentions using WOW words – these are all your descriptions, adjectives and exciting vocabulary. Story writing frame KS1
Have a look at the sentence starter on the story planner as well. I don’t want each sentence starting with ‘Then’ or ‘He’. Let’s make it more exciting! There are five ways you could start a sentence, using:
- A noun
- An adverb (e.g. words ending in the –ly suffix)
- Speech
- Ordering
- Where
Try and vary how your sentences start to make it exciting to read. Adding this in may mean that you have to reorder your sentence – that is okay! That is what editing is for 🙂
Once you have uploaded your stories, read someone else’s! Everyone has written such wonderful stories and it’s nice to share them. You can write a comment to them in the blog to say why you enjoyed it!
Hedgehog Needs A Hug
Girl and Her Dragon
Best Friends
Once upon a time, just before Christmas, a little young prickly hedgehog called Max, was hiding under a bush in the windy forest.
Max was very sad. He was nearly crying because he needed a big hug and he is was spiky that nobody wanted to come close to him.
It was a cold day with snow all over the green trees. Max ran into another huge bush and nearly bumped into a speedy monkey who was swinging from trees to trees. Monkey was surprised but smiled at Max. Monkey noticed Max was preoccupied and asked him why. They started to chat, to laugh and to play. Monkey hugged Max and they became friends for ever?.
What a lovely story Adrien 🙂 I love all the adjectives you have chosen to use to add more detail and you have written it very neatly. ⭐
Check this sentence:
He was nearly crying because he needed a big hug and he is was spiky that nobody wanted to come close to him.
I think you could edit it so that it makes more sense to the reader 🙂
Brilliant work Jack ⭐ What a lovely story with such a happy ending! I’m so impressed with how much you managed to write and all the adjectives you used. Well done 🙂
Good morning Miss carruthers,
This is my story. I changed because I had a new idea. Hope you enjoy my new story.
Once upon a time in a little town with not many people, a young boy called Max had a pet dragon called Bianca. Max was a kind,loving and brave boy with purple and black hair and a big, lively smile all the time on his face. He loved to rescue other people like helping them to cross the streets or to carry their heavy bags.
Bianca was a beautiful dragon filled with joy and peace. She lived with Max in a tiny house made of gold leaves .
One day Max had an idea. He decided to leave is hometown and travel around the world to see if every village was an happy place to live like his village. He packed his bag with food,clothes and blankets and flew off with Bianca. All of sudden a humongous storm approached from a distance so they had to land straight away. They landed in an enormous foggy city with a big, tall clock, lots of skyscrapers and a long river shaped like a snake. Max and Bianca froze for a minute because they never seen such massive town and they never felt so scared and shocked in their life. Everyone was rushing and looking sad. Max and Bianca thought that it was not how people should feel. So they decided to do something to make them happy. They cleared all the fog with Bianca’s huge wings so a lovely sun could shine on the them.Everybody in the city started to sing jolly songs like “ this little light of mine” and “shotgun”.
Max and Bianca decided that the whole planet needed to be happy. So they flew all around the world to spread peace and joy to everybody.
Once the whole planet became one happy place, Max and Bianca decided to go back home in their little village because they understood that even they had to feel happy. The only place where they were truly happy was in their little house made of golden leaves.
Oh Isabella, that is such a lovely story! ⭐ Really well done! I love how creative you have been with your ideas of how they managed to spread joy everywhere, and all the adjectives add so much description. I can really picture Bianca clearing the fog with her wings 🙂
Hedgehog ? needs a hug
There was a hedgehog? who lived under an oak tree?all by himself. Right now, he was cleaning his oak tree?. Hedgehog was so tired ? because he lived on his own and he had to take care of his oak tree?all by himself. All he did was cooking?,cleaning?,sleeping?and eating? because he had to take care of himself and his home. Hedgehog was feeling stressed-out because he had not been resting at all!
You might think, “why does he never have visitors?” and that’s because one day something terrible happened. Hedgehog was preparing a feast for some of his omnivore friends. When the friends came to the feast, there were only veggies?the table. Even though his friends were omnivores they liked meat? much more than veggies?. In fact, so much more that they left the oak tree! They told everybody else how mean the hedgehog was to them. That’s why nobody comes to his oak tree! But the poor hedgehog was just trying to make them happy by having a feast with his friends.
One day Hedgehog heard a voice saying, “Mummy l want to get a hedgehog. They are my favourite animal and they are so cute!” As soon as Hedgehog heard the little girl he new what to do. He sprang out of his oak tree and jumped on the little girl! The girl’s face turned from a frown to a smile and her hands went around hedgehog, giving him a big hug. The little girl took hedgehog home and and he lived happily with the little girl. THE END!!! ?
What a happy ending for your hedgehog 🙂 Well done Luisa! I’m so impressed that you were able to use lots of different ways to start your sentences ⭐
HEDGEHOG NEEDS A HUG
It was a bright sunny day in the forest, Jonathan the prickly hedgehog was deep in the burrow with his family. Jonathan lived with his parents and younger sister. They were called Jack, Jenny and Jill.
It was almost time for lunch. Everyone was starving and they wondered what they would eat! Jonathan said ‘Mum, I’m going out into the woods to get some food for everyone’. Mum replied ‘that’s very kind of you Jonathan, see you later’.
Jonathan went into the woods to look for some worms for lunch. After he walked for two miles, the weather suddenly changed. He looked up into the sky and was very worried. It started to rain heavily, there was lightning and the thunderstorms boomed loudly. He was very scared.
There were flash floods and Jonathan was carried away by the floods. Sadly, Jonathan got lost and hurt his leg, he could not move and was stuck in a ditch. Jonathan was worried and lonely. His parents and sister were filled with worry because they hadn’t seen him.
Jonathan lay in the ditch crying out for help, but no one could hear him. The following morning, two girls were playing near the ditch and heard a screaming noise. They are twins called Mo and Ma who lived on a farm with their mother. They followed the noise and found an injured hedgehog.
Mo shouted ‘Ma, come over here, look what I found’. Ma replied ‘It’s a wounded hedgehog’. They felt sorry for him and took him to their barn. Mo and Ma were sweet and kind as they cleaned his wounds and looked him until he felt better. Mo and Ma gave him lots of hugs while looking after him.
On the third day, Jonathan was ready to go back home as he could walk. Mo and ma were sad to see Jonathan go, but happy he felt better. He found his way home to forest.
From that day on, Jonathan’s family were excited to see him again and they lived happily in the burrow.
A lovely story Catherine 🙂 I’m so glad Mo and Ma could look after Jonathon so well!
miss I did my work but the reason why you can’t see it is because it is on word.
Well done Layla! If you want me to see it, then you can email it to the office. Or you can copy and paste the text onto the website 🙂
This is the story of a young, courageous girl called Emilia. She has brown short hair and she is special for her kindness and love. She lives in a cottage near the woods with her friendly and furry dog called Pepper.
One day Emilia was taking Pepper for a walk in the forest when suddenly she heard someone sobbing behind the bushes. She looked and looked until she saw a little blue dragon. “ Why are you crying?”
she asked politely to the dragon and “What is your name?”.
“My name is Fire and I am crying because I cannot find my home,my mum and my dad” replied the dragon still sobbing.
“I can help you if you like?” asked Emilia.” It will not be easy though because is really dark in the woods and it is almost night time” she said.“It is better that we start searching for them in the morning and you can come to sleep in my cottage” . The dragon felt really happy to have found a friend and he said “ Thank you! I would love to come to sleep in your place and not be alone in the forest”.
The following morning they stated hiking through the forest. They have been hiking for days and days. They went through rainy days,snowing days and foggy days.
One day suddenly ,they saw a huge mountain in front of them and they had to climb all the way over it. It took them 6 weeks to get to the other side! Once they were there, they decided to have a rest because they were really exhausted from the climbing. Fire didn’t know that he was leaning on a secret door hidden behind the mountain! Suddenly the secret door opened up. Emilia, Pepper and Fire went silently inside. “ But… this is my home!” cried Fire with joy! “ Mam,Dad you are here!” He shouted hugging them.
Fire introduced his parents to Emilia and Pepper and told them all about how kind she was to help him to find them and that she was his best friend forever!
Emilia and Pepper said that it was time for them to be go back home in the woods.She was sad to leave but happy that Fire had found his home and family and that she had found a new best friend.
A really lovely story Emilia. I can imagine that she would be sad to leave her new best friend, but hopefully they will have more adventures in the future together 🙂
One golden, sunny day, I saw a rather sad looking hedgehog scurrying in the park. She longed for a nice warm hug. I figured it out that she was upset because of the tears running down her face.. The hedgehog needed to find a caring friend. She got tired of looking around for a friend in the park so she went home. As soon as she got home she laid down on her cosy bed. Next morning she woke up to the sound of something knocking on her oak wood door. The hedgehog opened the door and a little turtle came in.The turtle said he wanted to be friends with her and to hug her when she’s sad. The hedgehogs face lit up and said of course you can be my friend.
I’m glad hedgehog found a friend at the end 🙂
Once upon a time, there was a boy called Jack and he always wanted a pet dragon. His hobby was dragons.
One morning at breakfast he said to his family ‘I want a pet dragon!’ So he packed his things and walked to the enchanted forest to find his dragon.
He saw a massive ice city in the clouds that had a huge castle, he decided to jump high into the sky to get to the castle.
When he arrived he saw a massive cage with a beautiful dragon inside. It was white & glittery. At first the dragon was scared of Jack and very stubborn. Jack unlocked the cage and asked if he wanted a new home with a new family where he could be free, the dragon said yes, he would love that!
Jack climbed onto the dragons back and they flew home through the beautiful clouds.
Once home, Jack asked his dad to build the dragon a den to sleep in. The dragon was very happy but not as happy Jack, his dream came true. They lived happily ever after. The end ?
A brilliant story Romey, well done ⭐ I’m impressed that you were able to use so many adjectives to describe what is happening in your story!
Miss Carruthers we sent a photo of our story awhile ago, please let us know if it didn’t arrive.
Yes I have received it!
I’m very impressed with your neat handwriting – you must have been trying really hard Finley! ⭐
Well done for including a range of punctuation!
Dear Miss Carruthers,
I already posted my story yesterday on Hedgehog needs a hug.
Thanks Rafael – I only got a photo of you holding a big orange box! Would you mind sending it again?
Well done Albert! A great story 🙂 Don’t forget to make sure that all your sentences start with capital letters – go back and check them!
Dear Miss Carruthers,
Once upon a time there lived a girl ?and a dragon ?called Mary and Bubble. Mary was a kind girl with blue eyes. Bubble was a friendly, green dragon. They were best friends and they lived in a tall tree on the edge of the valley. They went on exciting adventures all the time and rescued everyone in trouble. One sunny ? day something dreadful happened. While Mary and Bubble were peacefully resting on a branch of the tree, a fierce black snake ? with yellow spots and deep red eyes came and scared ? Bubble away. Mary called him but Bubble didn’t come back. Mary felt disheartened and terribly sad but bravely set of to find him. One the way when she was stumbling through the jungle she met a little brown playful monkey ?.“Hello have you seen my dragon?” asked Mary anxiously.”Yes” said the monkey.“It flew through the jungle toward Mount Everest.” Mary was so relieved ?. Let’s go there” she said so they swung from tree to tree until they reached the end of the jungle. When they arrived there Mary saw a yellow wooden canoe ? on the river bank so she clambered in the canoe with the monkey and rowed East towards Mount Everest.
Unfortunately during the journey, they noticed that there was water? inside the boat.” Oh no, we are going to drown! “cried Mary.” Mary and monkey were terrified.“BUBBLE, BUBBLE!”she shouted. The water was cold ?.Mary could swim but monkey couldn’t so he climbed on Mary’s back. They felt helpless when suddenly they heard a swish sound and felt that that something was picking them up. Mary looked up and she saw Bubble! Mary was overjoyed ? to see him again.”Bubble you saved us!”said Mary. Bubble smiled ?and took them back home.
What a wonderful story Marie ⭐ I love all the description of how your characters are feeling throughout the story 🙂
Once upon a time there was a little girl called Annie. She lived in a little cottage with her father on the top of a hill. Annie often helped her daddy clear the table. One day Annie heard angry shouting. “Daddy”, she said curiously, “can we go and see why the villagers are shouting? Please!” “All right”, replied her dad. So they set off. When they arrived in the village Annie saw her friend Lily. “What’s going on?”, she said. “There’s a giant dragon attacking the village!” “That can’t be true!“, cried Annie. She told her dad what Lily had said. „I want to see this dragon for myself,“ said her father. So they went through the crowd. Now Annie could see the dragon: It had green skin, yellow eyes, three horns and at the end of its tail was a heart shaped fin. Its scales were orange. Annie could see that it had a sad face. She asked her dad if they could take the dragon home and see why it was so sad. „Okay“, said her dad. So they brought the dragon home. “Why are you looking so sad?”, asked Annie quietly. “Because I lost my mum, said the dragon sadly. Annie promised to help him find his mum. So they set off the next day and searched in the woods. Suddenly, they heard some noise. It sounded like an elephant. Where was it coming from? They walked through the wood cautiously. All of a sudden the dragon saw a hole on the ground. “Watch out!”, it shouted. Then Annie looked inside the hole and saw another bigger dragon. “Mummy!”, roared the dragon happily. They had to get Annie’s dad to help to get mummy dragon out. When the mummy dragon was freed, the little dragon suddenly remembered something.”You never told me your name”, said the little dragon to Annie. Annie told it her name and the dragon thanked for her help. „I am called Tara“ said the little Dragon. „Bye Tara“, said Annie and then both dragons flew off. Annie and her daddy waved and they lived happily ever after on the top of their hill. The end.
What a fantastic story Sophia ⭐ I love all the description and adjectives you have used!
Chapter zero:
A very quick introduction
Once upon a time there was a little boy called Billy James Fisherman Bond. He lived in a small blue house by the sea, with his mum, his dad, his grandparents, his brother George and his sister Lily. They were both older than him (it’s quite obvious that his parents and grandparents are) and they both picked on him for that. He wasn’t just the youngest of this family; he was the youngest of his whole family too. His cousins were older than him his grandpa’s children were older than him, his grandma’s children were older than him. Name any relative. Billy was younger than them.
Chapter one:
Fire is fire and fire is in the English dictionary under fire
Billy lay in bed early one morning, petrified. No – 3 o’clock one night. He had just seen something you definitely would’ve been petrified by if you saw. Well, at that time. Loads and loads of fire was covering his bedroom window. Actually, you would probably be petrified at any time if you saw that. Well, at least he’d be nice and warm for the rest of that night and about twenty nights more. But he was still petrified. “W-w-what is th-th-that?” He stammered. What does it look like? A giant red Ferrari with ‘I will only eat pizza, spaghetti and burgers from now on’ written in bright yellow on the back? Clearly, this boy had to be taught what the English dictionary even does! Get a dictionary, find ‘F’ and then find ‘Fire’! It’s that simple! (Google dictionary is simpler.) Oh, yes the fact that it was 3 o’clock in the morning and that he needed glasses to see properly. That makes it a bit fairer for him.
Chapter three:
This is going to be a BRILLIANT anecdote for breakfast!
Billy’s bedroom window is burning, Billy’s bedroom window is burning, fetch the engines, fetch the engines, fire! fire! Fire! fire! Pour on water, pour on water! The fire was still there, and Billy was getting impatient to know what was going on – but he was still petrified. “Identify yourself immediately!” was what he meant to say, but all that came out was “hello” in a very small voice.
“Hello to you too.”
Billy jumped. The fire had gone away. It was a very soothing voice.
“Who are you?”
“Nimblefoot Doofensmirt.”
“Where are you?”
“Right outside your bedroom window”
“What are you?”
“A dragon.”
They both said nothing for a moment until Nimblefoot broke the silence. “Alright, I’ve got a job for you,” he said, still not showing himself.
“Y-y-yes?”
“Forget everything I just told you.”
“It-t-t’s v-v-very hard t-t-to.
“I guess it is.”
“So you’re a dragon.”
“Yes.”
“You’re right outside my house, right now.”
“Precisely.”
“Your name is Grimblesnoot Domflicpoo.”
“Not exactly.”
“Hey, I’m tired.”
“What do you mean you’re tired? It’s 3 o’clock in the afternoon!”
“I’m not falling for that one.”
“Seriously! I’m not kidding!”
“You’re not as smart as you think.”
“What do you mean?!”
The dragon turned around. Billy gasped. “Oh, I forgot to tell you. Nobody likes it when I get angry!” said the dragon. But then suddenly, he froze as suddenly as if he was just struck by a bolt of lightning. Then, about five seconds later, he was back to his loving, calming sort of voice again. He took hold of Billy. Billy waved and screamed and wrestled, but it was no use. But what he didn’t know was that the dragon wasn’t taking him somewhere bad.
Chapter four
Just another night going to the beach but this time’s different – really different
“Let go of me! I’m only eight! I’m not old enough for these adventures!”
Billy kept trying to persuade Nimblefoot to put him down.
“Imagine what my parents and grandparents would say if they found out I was hanging with some dragon!”
Is that supposed to be some kind of corny joke?
“Err, yes, it is.”
“Good to hear.”
(Aw, come on, don’t you get it? Hanging like hanging out with someone and hanging like hanging from the dragon! Oh, well I thought that was a rather good one.)
They had arrived in only about 10 seconds. “Wow! You’re a fast flyer!” “No, we’re at the beach the beach.” “Oh.” Bill spotted a cave. “Can we go in there?” ”No, no, no, we’re not going in THERE! “Why not?” “If you ever go in there, you may never come out.” Billy shivered.
“I’m not a fan of those types of myths.”
“I’m not really a fan of any myths.”
“But you ARE a myth.”
“I am?”
“Yes, dragons are myths, didn’t you know that?”
“I don’t know anything about your world.”
“Really?”
“Really.”
“Even the things I told you?”
“Well, apart from them.”
“So, is there anywhere else we can go?”
“Well, I’m a first class swimmer.”
They both looked at the sea. “OK.”
Chapter five:
I have run out of chapter names so let’s just call this chapter _____________________
“Get in my mouth.”
“What do you mean, get in your mouth?!”
“I you get in my mouth you can go underwater safely.”
“But won’t water come in through your nose?”
“Dragons can close their nostrils like frogs can close their ears. It’s simple.”
“Doesn’t sound very simple to me.”
“Yeah, but it is for dragons.”
“Well, even though you can do that, I still don’t want to go underwater.”
“OK then.”
Nimblefoot picked up Billy and started flying over the sea.
“Is this what you call swimming?” said Billy.
“This is what I meant by first class,” said the dragon.
The dragon kept on flying and flying and the two friends kept talking and talking until the dragon came to a halt. “Ow,” he said.
“Why did you stop?” Billy asked, while the dragon rubbed his nose.
“I bumped into something,” he said.
“Yeah, but there’s nothing there.”
“But I bumped into something. Let’s turn back.”
The dragon turned around towards the beach. He went a few metres forward but then he bumped his nose again.
“Let’s go left.”
The same thing happened. It happened again when he went right.
“This is weird,” said Billy.
“This has happened to me before and I think I know who’s doing it,” said Nimblefoot.
Chapter six:
Finally we can end the book with this chapter because it’s getting quite boring and I also need to do my maths and PE
“I think there’s only one way out of here,” said the dragon.
“What is that only way out of here?” Billy replied.
“Get in my mouth,” the dragon repeated.
“If it’s the only way out of here then yes.”
Billy got into the dragon’s mouth and they went underwater.
“Disgusting, how much do you put in here?”
“All my life savings, a puppy, some newborn babies, a girl dog and even a dinosaur egg I found doing adventures like this.”
“I can see that,” said Billy.
“Wait a second,” he said. “How are you talking and no water is coming in through your mouth? A, that’s another of the tricks dragons can do and B, you spoke when it was my turn to speak. Oh, and you can come out of my mouth now.”
Billy stepped out of the dragon’s mouth and on to the sand.
“That did work. I’m glad we’re back on dry land. I’m not really the underwater type.”
The end
And the moral of the story: never make your schoolwork this long.
Well done Rex, this is a hilarious story! I wonder why the dragon kept bumping into things when there was nothing there, what was he bumping into? I like the moral of your story, but so long as you had fun writing it, and I had fun reading it, then it is definitely worth doing 🙂
Hello miss, here’s my new story!
There was a sweet little hedgehog called Joe who wanted to say hello to his dearest grandma who lives far, far away in another country.
He always uses the old computer to chat with her. They both love chatting for hours and hours because they can’t see each other very often.
But one day the old computer was broken and Joe didn’t know how to fix it! He was very sad because he wanted to talk to his grandma. Then his best friend Ted passed by. Ted wanted to play hide and seek with Joe. But Joe had another plan for Ted.
Ted is a genius with old computers and he fixed the problem right away! Ted said that it was so super easy to fix. Joe was Ted very grateful. He was truly his best friend ever. And Joe can from now on happily call his grandma again.
Bye, Bo
I’m so glad that Joe could talk to his grandma again 🙂 What a great story!
One upon a time there was a hedgehog named Hedgehog who lived in the dark woods. Hedgehog was sad because he didn’t have any friends and he really needed a hug but there was no one to hug him.
Looking deep in the woods, he still couldn’t find anyone to hug. He thought he heard somebody but it was just the howling wind. Hedgehog looked again underground, in a big tree and in a long river but nothing was found.
Carefully, he crossed a steep bridge to pick up sticks so he could build a house. The next day, he looked in another river to try to find somebody to hug. The river was bubbling and bubbling. Suddenly there was a kind crocodile called Crocky who said, “Do you want a hug?” so they hugged.
They became best friends. Hedgehog found a bigger and stronger house to live in with his new friend.
What a lovely story John 🙂 I love the ending, they would definitely need a bigger house to live in!
Once upon a time a boy called Miles met a big white dragon called Dragle. Miles was a little shy and so was Dragle. The dragon was happy to have a new friend and they wanted to play together.
Playing tag, Miles ran very fast through the tall grass away from Dragle and got lost deep inside the woods. Dragle felt worried and sad that Miles was lost. The kind dragon wanted to help her friend.
Dragle twisted and turned her enormous wings to fly high into the light blue sky over the park and looked down to search for Miles. Suddenly, she spotted Miles running fearfully out of the woods.
Miles was very happy to see his dragon friend. They wanted to play nicely again but made sure not to get lost!
A brilliant story Rebecca 🙂 I love all the description and the different ways you have chosen to start your sentences.
girl and her dragon
once upon a time there was a beautiful girl who was just walking around the forest. she was skipping and smiling when she then saw a dragon. it was a huge and scary dragon with a long tail. but in his heart he was a kind and loving dragon who decided to let the girl be his friend. the girl was scared at first but then became really goo friends with him. the next day she bought him strawberries and grapes. he was very happy and happily ate all of them. the girl then got on his back and they decided to fly high above the big clouds. seeing all of the town from high above. they were true friends
Wonderful work Gabi! I love all the description in your writing. ⭐ Please remember to start each sentence with a capital letter.
I made some changes to my story
What a brilliant story Joshua ⭐ Well done for taking great care with your handwriting. I love some of your word choices – ‘Cheerfully’ is a wonderful way to start a sentence! 🙂
Once upon a time there a girl with long strawberry red hair that she always wore up in a ponytail and large blue eyes and her name was Rose and she had a pet dragon called Bubble. They would go on adventures every Saturday and today they decide to fly through the forest and they were resting on a high green tree that can see out to the sea. They saw another dragon that had hurt itself , his wing was broken . So me and Bubble flew down to the beach to help the poor dragon. He was alone and scared. Bubble got the dragon on her back with me and flew him back home and we helped him get better. Once he was better he flew home to his family .
The end
Brilliant Mila 🙂 I love how many adjectives you have included ⭐
Be careful to not put yourself in the story and keep talking about Rose. If you are in the story, you should be introduced at the start. Well done!