Welcome to the Daily English Task
Yesterday you began writing your own diary entry about Mr Majeika’s arrival at school.
Lots of you made a great start writing your first paragraph and I was able to give you some feedback to improve.
Today’s English focus is:
Published Writing
Task
Today is an opportunity to finish off your diary writing from yesterday (if you haven’t already) and write your final draft with all of your corrections made.
Once you have finished your writing piece, write your first name on your work and send a photo of it and I will add it to the gallery, where I can give you feedback.
You can upload your work here or email the office.
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I look forward to seeing your amazing finished pieces!
Challenge
Read your class mates writing from the gallery and write a comment about their work on the blog. It will be valuable to review each others work 🙂
Second paragraph
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I felt so weirded out an old looking man riding on a magic carpet that’s not what you see every day. Then Mr. Potter turned around and saw the man he was confused. He said “Majeika” who is Majeika? Then Mr. Potter said “Mr. Majeika is your new teacher” WHAT! he’s our new teacher I couldn’t believe it. Next Melanie started saying to Mr. Potter that Mr. Majeika rode on a magic carpet. Mr. Potter asked if Mr. Majeika rode on on a magic carpet.
Mr. Majeika said he rode on a bicycle, then he pointed at the magic carpet and transformed it into a bicycle. I didn’t know how he did it but he did. After that he went to the class and he became a strict teacher.
Helena, well done for finishing your diary entry. I really enjoyed reading your work and I loved how you included your class mates too! ⭐️
Clemence, great work. I loved how you described the magic carpet with animals and patterns joined together! ⭐️
Chloe K, great effort with your writing. You make it really clear how magical Mr Majeika is! ⭐️
Emily, well done with your writing. I really like how you have included lots about how you felt, it makes it interesting to read. ⭐️
16th April 2020 (part 2)
Dear Diary
Mr Potter said, ‘You’re late!’.
And that weird guy on the magic carpet said, ‘Sorry, my carpet took a wrong turn’.
Mr Potter shook his head, ‘Pardon?’. Everyone giggled, even me.
‘I said “My carpet took a wrong turn”, no, I mean, my 42-wheeled bicycle took a wrong turn!’.
Then every child who heard that laughed furiously for three minutes. Year three, year two, year five (who were going on a trip to a farm) and even half of years six and seven, who heard this through the door!
‘SILENCE!’ shouted Mr Potter.
Then it felt like the whole world went quiet, no cars, no talking, no sound at all. Then the man said, ‘I am Mr Majeika! Who wants to get on my bike?’. All forty of us said yes. Mr Potter gave Mr Majeika a foul look but Mr Majeika continued, ‘to umm… see all the Sky Scrapers for your topic on tall buildings?’ All aboard!’.
And he rode out of the window with us behind him.
I can’t exactly explain what happened next but I heard screams and a lot of glass. The next day I was in a hospital?! Then I saw everyone else in a care bed and not Mr Majeika. And so I guessed that he got fired.
I fell asleep, relieved to be alive.
The End
Wow Julian, what an adventure with Mr Majeika’s arrival! I’m sure you were glad to get some sleep after that day! ⭐️
Good effort Billie, I like how you added some humour into your writing! ⭐️
Sebastian, great effort, your handwriting is superb! I like how the magic carpet landed with a bump! ⭐️
(Part 2)
16th April 2020
Dear Diary
Today has still been a good day because Mr Majeika did the best teaching, but the new teacher that Mr Potter was very cross with came! Mr Potter said ‘who is that?’ and Mr Potter came and shouted ‘WHERE WERE YOU!!!’ And the new teacher ran away. The magic Carpet wasn’t working so Mr Majeika put the Magic Carpet in with the toys. It was break time and one of the children went on the magic Carpet. Everyone said not to do it and suddenly the magic Capet flew around the wrong way. Everyone shouted and I called Mr Majeika to stop the magic carpet! The magic Carpet didn’t stop! He had to use his biggest power of all. Everyone went back to their seats and Mr Majeika used his magic power and the magic Carpet stopped! The children got off and the magic Carpet flew off to Mr Majeika‘s house.
Everyone was so happy after!
Graceanne, you have some lovely ideas. I like how the children had a go on the magic carpet and it didn’t stop! Well done ⭐️
Dear Miss Jones, I have just uploaded my diary where I have added a few lines since yesterday. Have a good weekend everyone !
Thanks Penelope. Lovely handwriting! You have included lots about your feelings, I would feel confused too with a new teacher arriving on a magic carpet! ⭐️
Chloe H, well done with your writing effort! You have included lovely description. I love your sentence ‘my head was full of thoughts!’ ⭐️
Ethan, well done with your diary entry. You’ve used some great vocabulary. I like the word eccentric! Good to see you used a dictionary to help you too! ⭐️
Karolina, well done! You structured your writing well. I love your phrase ‘the carpet made a big impression,’I can see it certainly did! ⭐️
Emi well done! I can see you have read over your writing as your spelling and punctuation is super ⭐️
Patrick, great effort with your writing. I like how you wrote the wind slowed Mr Majeika down on his carpet, that’s why he has late. ⭐️
Well done Angie, I love your choice of adjectives, especially ‘mesmerising.’
You described the magic carpet brilliantly. ⭐️
Well done Eugenia, you have used some lovely vocabulary to describe your feelings ⭐️
Good effort Jiana, remember to include lovely description like you did last time ?⭐️