Good morning, Year 5!
Today’s English focus: Published Writing
Today you can type up your finished piece of work to share with the class.
I am so proud to have a class of…
This will be your redraft after the feedback given to you on your draft writing. Please look back at any targets from before and apply these to your final versions. You may have had some targets from last week so ensure that you focus on improving on those today as well.
On this blog, I will give you some positive feedback and I would encourage everyone to read each other’s and offer some positive feedback.
If you prefer to hand-write this, you can upload a photo of your fact file using the Homework Uploader but please ensure your first name is written at the top. You may wish to type up your fact file in the comment and send in a photo of your superhero only. It is up to you and you are welcome to do what works best for you.
We look forward to reading your wonderful writing!
Good luck and have a lovely weekend!
Mrs Avdiu xx
Regan’s mini superhero fact file:
Sara’s work:
Mathilde’s superhero:
Jeanne’s writing:
Gabriella’s writing:
Hello Everyone !!!
I hope you are all safe and well !!
I miss you all so much
This is my final published piece
Real Name: Alexandra Belzza
Born : 1st of January 2000
Age: 20 years old
Weakness: She can not be outside of the water for to long or she will lose her powers. If there is a water flood she can move the water with her mind so that the people can not get hurt.
The person/superhero that gave Aqua Women her powers was Aqua Man, this is because one day Aqua Women ( she was not a superhero yet) fell into the sea and Aqua Man found her and gave her some powers so she could save the world to.
Where does Aqua Women live: She lives deep down in the ocean and she can stay underwater for as long as she wants and she only comes up to land whenever she gets a new mission.
What she looks like: Aqua Women has light blue hair and a aqua green and blue superhero suit she also has a seashell clip clipped to her blue hair.
Interesting Facts: In her spare time, Aqua Women likes to swim with the turtles and the dolphins and sometimes she even swims with the sharks!!!!!
I hope you enjoyed my published piece
Please tell me if I have spelt something wrong or if I should edit something.
~Elena
Hi Elena, We miss you too!
Thank you for sharing your writing and of course you don’t need to remind me to tell you if you need to edit something because I will always give you feedback as usual 🙂
Please check spellings for to
Also, please check your punctuation – there is a full stop missing and a question mark too. Well done!
Hello everyone! I hope that you are all safe and well!
Here is my paragraph, I hope that you enjoy it!
Lilly Evans
About herself:
Lilly Evans was born to a normal family in 2005 on the 7th November. She is a Scorpio in the Horoscope so that is probably why she gets so mad easily. She has burning red hair with bright green eyes. Lilly is a wonderful girl and is very loyal. She lives in London with her two parents and her older sister, Petunia. She often needs to travel because of saving the world.
Superhero:
When Lilly Evans transforms, she is called The Fire Breathing Dragon. This is because her superpower is handling fire. She can breath fire when she is really mad and when she is, she can become as aggressive as a real dragon.
The Master of Power:
The Master of Power was the person who gave Lilly this extra-ordinary superpower. For short, everyone who knows him calls him TMP. TMP has all the powers in the world and to get his followers, he spies on them and see if they are good enough to be Superheros.
To be a superhero, you need to be resilient, brave, kind, helpful and hardworking. All of these things were describing Lilly. So this is why TMP gave her the powers.
Fire Ocean:
When Lilly is mad and badly behaved, she often goes to the Fire Ocean. This is where she can scream and shout, cry and scream, shout and cry. Yes, it is repetitive as she has to do this to get all the anger out. Did you know she is nothing like this before she transforms?
Superpowers:
Lilly got her superpowers when she was at the Beach in Croatia. She was walking alone when someone or something taped her on the back. She turned around and realised it was a man . Not any man, a man who could hold fire…
He gave her the fire and as soon as she touched it, she could make fire anywhere that she would go…
Weaknesses:
Every superhero has a weakness. For an example, Lilly. Lilly’s weakness is staying calm when someone is rude or annoying to her. She can get into a bad mood and it’s very hard to make her calm again.
Skills:
Lilly can play the piano and is really good at science. People are sometimes jealous of her as she so talented at school.
See you soon??
This is excellent! Well done! I think a lot of people have the same weakness she has!
Good morning everyone, I hope you are all well. Here is my final piece of writing:
Name: Kiara Smith
Born: 11th June 1999 in Sydney, Australia
Mother’s job: Farmer and Maid
Unfortunate event: Fell severely unwell, her mother could not afford medicine so she lost her ability to walk and became part deaf.
Significant event: By the age of two, Kiara could do sign-language, talk and to very hard math equations. Kiara wished to go to school but her mother could not afford to send her to school.
Looks and personality
She was a very bright child who was always happy. She had short brown hair and was quite tall. She loved to skip and play with the neighbours. She was held back by her condition but that didn’t stop her. She was such a bubbly person who was so gentle. People told her that she could never become what she dreamed but she was strong and didn’t listen to their words.
Key Facts:
Kiara childhood was not easy and as she grew up she wanted to help other kids with her condition. She went to work like her mother and earned enough money so she could go to school. She studied medicine and maths as she wanted to become a doctor when she grew up. When she was older she went to university and got a degree for what she needed. When she tried to find a hospital, everywhere she went they said no as she was deaf and it just would not work. No matter how many times people told her she couldn’t become a doctor she kept trying, until one place said she could work and she became very successful. She wanted to help others who needed he,p but couldn’t get the help they needed. So she decided to start a charity, at first it wasn’t very good but after a few years her charity had lots of workers and was open around the world. She died on the 25th October 2015 with heart filled with joy. She is known through the world for her bravery and perseverance. She always said that “you can become whatever you want, nobody can stop you”.
Hi Elsa, I really enjoyed reading the inspiring background of this superhero. You even ended with a very effective quote. Well done!
Hello Miss I have just uploaded a photo of the Superhero booklet I made – I hope you like it. It is all about a superhero called Thunder Falcon!
Thanks Erin! I will upload it shortly. Can’t wait to see!
Good morning everyone! I hope that you are all well, here is my published piece of work:
THE DECIPHERER :
(Dani Green)
AT A GLANCE….
Name: Danielle Green
Date of birth: 8th August 2003
Place of birth: London
Superpower: Multilingual, mind – reader
Interests: Gardening, reading
HOW IT CAME TO BE ….
The Decipherer, also known as Dani Green, gained her powers one winter’s evening whilst camping with a group of friends.
After a while, she became separated from her friends.
Starved, she came across a rather succulent looking berry.
Eventually the urge to eat it became too powerful and she gave in to the temptation. As she placed into her mouth, Dani felt a warm buzzing sensation and it soon melted on her tongue.
Once reunited with her friends, she fell into a deep slumber and awoke having acquired the powers to both read minds and talk any language ever known to man.
SUPERPOWERS SAVE THE DAY….
Thanks to her unusual abilities, Dani has proved herself really valuable in helping multiple countries reach agreements and avoid conflicts with each other.
Despite her very young age, she is now indispensable to many worldwide governments due to fact that she is an amazing communicator, able to read the intentions of those around her.
DID YOU KNOW?…
In her spare time, Dani is either curled up with a book or getting her hands dirty and doing gardening. A new type of rose has also been named after her: Rosa Decipherer.
This is fantastic. I like the way you added a DID YOU KNOW…? at the end with a very fascinating ‘fact’. THis superhero sounds very cool! I am impressed with how imaginative you are.
Thank you Mrs Avdiu 🙂
Hello everyone hope you are all and are having a nice day this is my finished piece of work.
The Watch
The Real Watch
This superhero is called The Watch he got his powers from Zorbon as well and is grateful for them, most of the time. His actual name is Hugo but not many people know that. The watch is a very nice and caring person and he loves to do good to the world. He lives in a family of three his parents and him. He has no sibling to be with so he appreciates his time saving the world.
Also he lives in a little house he isn’t very rich or poor and he is grateful for that. Hugo also has a pet which he likes to spend time with but his parents take more care of it. Its name is Bubbles and its a little dog Hugo doesn’t really want people to know because he thinks everyone thinks superhero’s don’t need support. Bubbles is a Labrador and has got Hugo through some tough times and she is always there for him.
His Skills
The Watch got his name from the powers Zorbon gave him. The Watch’s powers are freezing time for 4 minutes 3 times in every battle, he has eyes everywhere and is particularly clever. These powers usually come in handy but not all the time but Hugo is always happy with what he gets.
What the watch feels
Does The Watch feels under to much pressure from all the crowd scared and shouting at him what to do. Or does The Watch not mind and likes everyone watching him. Well Hugo actually doesn’t mind the crowd because he likes everyone he is just focused on what he is doing at that moment.
Super work Claudia!
I think it would be easier to read if you included full stops commas. SO for example, your sentence This superhero is called The Watch he got his powers from Zorbon as well and is grateful for them, most of the time.
should say: This superhero is called The Watch. He got his powers from Zorbon as well and is grateful for them, most of the time.
Hello everyone. I hope you are well. This is my work for today:
GOLDEN RAINBOW GIRL (GR-Girl)
Introduction
Emily Gareth was born in England on the 19th of March 1995, where she lived with her parents, until she acquired superpowers. She received these when she picked up a mysterious looking Ruby that fell from the sky on a bright sunny afternoon. This is when she re-named herself ‘Golden Rainbow Girl’- or for short GR-Girl- and went to live in a forest. In the woods she developed her new powers and learnt how to control them.
Growing up
As she grew up in the forest GR-Girl became a beautiful young lady with brown hair, sea-blue eyes and rosy cheeks. She is a fierce warrior (with lots of muscles) but she also has a kind, gentle smile that makes everyone at ease.
Superpowers!
GR-Girl’s superpower is to harness the power of nature. She is able to control the sun, rain, snow and wind. To help use this power she also has a power to fly. When chasing bad people, she is able to use the energy of the weather to catch them. Finally, GR-Girl can use her power for helping people in water as she has the power to control oceans and seas.
Hi Ayako, I love the word ‘acquired’ – well done! Her powers sound so cool. This is very well written – excellent use of punctuation and a wonderful range of sentence openers. Well done!
Hello everyone
Real name : Terra Eclipse
Superhero name : Earth girl
Born : 23 February
Weakness: metal
Mother Nature was her mother and universe man was her dad, her two younger sisters also were superheroes they were called the moon and the sun.
Terra and her sisters didn’t know they had powers until they each were 10. When they all were babies they lived in space but when they got older their parents thought it would be best to disguise as humans until they turned 10 then they could revel the truth!
Terra has dark blonde hair with strands of green ( her parents hide it though ) and blue eyes. When she is in her superhero form she has a shiny dark green cloak and a wooden staff, when she gets angry her eyes glow green!
I hope everyone has a great day ??????☺️
Wow! Great punctuation Mathilde. Well done. I wonder why her parents hide the strands of green in her hair? Is this to hide the fact she is a superhero? How cool!
Hi everyone I hope you’re all good and keeping well!
Red Fox
This superhero got his powers when one day he was running away from some bullies and ran into an alley. Jake tripped over an uneven slab and grazed his knee, then a fox ran over and bit his hand! The next day Jake had all the senses a Fox has, like super high jumping, super speed and super stealth.
His Enemy and his Weakness:
Red Fox has an enemy like Batman and a weakness like Superman.
His enemy is ‘Bin Man’ and his weakness is Bin food so it’s quite hard to defeat Bin Man but the deadly duo always find a way. Bin Man isn’t strong at all that’s why he relies on his evil minions to create robotic machines that Bin Man can control.
I hope you liked reading about Red Fox! Bye.
~Iggy
What does he look like:
Red Fox looks like a metallic Fox but with eyes that can shoot lasers and hands that can create sound waves that have a super screeching noise. He has a sidekick called White Fox and they both work together to defeat crime. Red Fox symbolises a normal fox and White Fox symbolises an Arctic Fox.
Where does he live:
Jake Middleton (Red Fox) lives in a homemade shack in an alleyway because his parents died a year before he became a superhero. Since then he has been living with his best friend, Ash Doherty. (White Fox)
Wow! I like the background story of how he got his powers and how a negative (bullying) became a positive. Sometimes bad experiences can actually have a positive impact on our lives and make us stronger in the long run 🙂
Good Afternoon Everyone!
I hope you are all having a great day!
Born: 1994 in Lisbon, Portugal
Real Name: Harry Ackto
Superhero Name: The Stinger
Superpower: Can fly and sting people at will.
How he got his power: It was a hot day and Harry got stung by a wasp. The next day he woke up and had grown wings and a stinger.
Lives in: A wasps’ nest
Age: 26
DISCOVERY OF POWERS:
The discovery of Harry’s powers started on a scorching summers day when Harry decided to go for a walk. He walked down by the beach and up by the forest until he reached a clearing. At first Harry couldn’t see anything but as he moved closer he saw a huge wasps’ nest. Harry turned to run but it was too late the wasps had seen him and were closing in around him, and then, it happened. Harry had been stung! He let out a shrill scream and sprinted back to his house where he went back to his bedroom, bolted the door and went straight to sleep. The next day he woke up to see that he had grown wings and a stinger.
VILLAINS THAT HE’S CONQUERED:
During Harry’s short time as a superhero he has saved the world from, a giant football falling from space, an evil supervillain called Jack, a lion the size of two elephants and a giant. Harry’s superhero name is The Stinger and he is friends with other superheroes called Forever Boy who can live forever, The Invisible Girl who can turn invisible and The Deadly Duo who are two brothers with two huge hammers.
I hope you enjoyed my paragraph!
Great start Theo! Such a cool story – a wasp! I really enjoyed reading this because of the wide range of vocabulary and sentence openers (during, at first etc). I look forward to seeing the rest!
Hi Everyone,
GAMER BOY
Name: Henry Domer
Super Hero name: Gamer Boy
Born: 16th of May 2005
Grew up: Deiva Marina, Italy
Job: part time chef
weakness: He can’t use his powers for over 1 hour or then
he will become weak because the powers take his energy away.
Who gave him powers?:
The person who gave Gamer Boy his powers was a 97 year old retired superhero how had almost been defeated by the greatest super villain of all. The reason why he gave them to Henry was because when he was walking in the streets, he saw him chasing after a man who had stolen an old ladies purse and thought that he would be the right one.
What powers was he given?:
His powers are: super speed (so he can chase criminals very easily), he can fly ( or it would be very hard to reach his home cloud) and a special vision to see closer what is happening under him (it would be impossible to see with the naked eye).
Where does he live?:
Gamer Boy now lives on a motionless cloud in which he can see everything that is happening below and around him.
Fun facts:
When he has nothing to do, he fly’s all around the world looking for crime to stop.
This is my final piece, i hope you like it.
Thank you Marco for this super fact file! This is very creative and I love how he was given the powers by a retired superhero 🙂
Next time, I would like to see a wider range of vocabulary in your writing. Have a look at Theo’s for some ideas on how to make your sentences more complex!
Well done Marco. Have a lovely weekend
Hi everyone,
I hope you are having a great day so far!??
This is my superhero description below!?
Name – Conor Ash
Sidekick – Blaze
Superhero Name – Dynamo
Date of Birth – 3rd July 2002
Powers – The ability to fly, being able to make fire AND being able to put it out and the ability to make portals and to teleport.
How they got their powers: At the age of Seven, Conor/Dynamo was pushed over a cliff-face by a group of terrorist. Conor found that if he concentrated hard enough he could propel himself to fly! So he flew away!
Dynamo later grew up on the headlines of every newspaper: “Dynamo Kid saves the world again!” and every single person knew his name. He has been close to death on several occasions but he has persevered and defeated the enemy.
Although Dynamo has his powers, he also has his weaknesses. Dynamo is terribly afraid of spiders and he is also afraid to be alone, so he always has his sidekick, Blaze, with him!
Blaze
Blaze has his powers as well. He can read people’s minds and he can also easily solve codes and mystery puzzles. He is good-natured and a great sidekick to Dynamo!
Thank you Seb for this super fact file! I like the idea of how he persevered. He is afraid of spiders like me!
Next time, I would like to see some more complex sentences in your writing. Have a look at Theo’s for some ideas on how to make your sentences more complex!
Have a lovely weekend Sebastiao
Regan thank you for sending your mini fact file. I have uploaded it on the blog. It looks amazing! A tiny book with such BIG ideas. Well done
Mathilde, your picture of your superhero took my breath away! You are so talented
Hi Sara! Thank you for sending in your work which I have shared on the blog. I love the picture – very creative! It is very difficult for me to read the writing. Please could you make sure the photo is a clear photo? Also please save this link so you can send work via the Homework Uploader: https://www.stvincentsprimary.org.uk/upload-homework/
you can also write ‘Send File’ in the ‘Search’ bar on the school website and it will take you to the Homework Uploader. I sometimes receive emails from the office a little later so this will ensure I get the work on time 🙂
Hi everyone, this is my finished piece of work. I hope you enjoy reading my finished piece.
Real Name: Joe McLaren
Super Name: Fire Boy
Lives: In a lava cave
Age: 27
Born: 16 august 2009
Superhero Powers: Can breathe fire, shoot fire out of his mouth and can mind read.
Other infomation about Fire Boy.
The superhero that gave Fire Boy his powers was called Zaber-tron. Fire Boy lives with two other fire superheroes one called Fire Man and the other called Fire Eye. If the lava cave blows up he will be able to survive as he has a throne with a forcefield around it, he also has a intruder system where if someone tries to brake in a siren noise would start.
How Fire Boy looks.
He has dark red hair with a pale face, he also has fire eyes. He is very tall and muscular, his hairstyle is a mohawk.
Skills: Fire Boy is very good at his fighting, he has a great aim as he is able to shoot fire and Fire Boy is good at Mind reading. This helps to see what his opponent’s fighting moves will be.
Very good Dylan! Don’t forget to mention how your superhero got his powers?
Hello everyone. I hope you are enjoying your day so far. Here is the rest of my writing.
Real Name: Emily Kimberly
Superhero Name: Golden Angel ?
Superpowers: Healing, flying, invisibility, strength, controlling the weather and invincibility.
Weakness: Getting her wings wet because she will straight away fall to the ground.
How did Emily get her superpowers?
Emily got her superpowers from her parents. Her mum has invisibility and healing, her dad has super strength and he can fly but all of them are invincible.
She is an only child.
Where does Emily live?:
Emily lives in the clouds because she is a very special angel and to control the weather as well.
What she looks like:
Emily has got light brown hair and greenish-yellowish eyes. She also wears a golden bracelet with a small star on it. Her superhero costume is a white dress with a gold belt and her angel wings attached to the dress. Then she wears a small flower on her head.
Extra facts:
Emily’s job (except of being a superhero) is an emergency nurse.
Emergency nurses treat patients who arrive in critical conditions.
When Golden Angel isn’t doing anything, she would usually read a book or visit her mum and dad who lives in a mansion so they can spend some quality time together.
I hope you enjoyed reading my writing ?! I hope you have a lovely rest of the day and a fantastic weekend! ?
Wow! A superhero who lives in the clouds! How amazing 🙂 Next time try to include more complex sentences. Have a look at some of the other posts for ideas 🙂
Hi everyone hope you all had a great morning, this is my finished piece of my superhero.?
Personality:
Real Name: Wendy Williams.
Superhero name: Dark Fire?
Date of Birth: 3rd July 1998 Madrid, Spain
Powers: she can read people’s mind, she can throw fireballs?, she can teleport anywhere and control the weather.
Person who gave her powers: Zobon gave Dark Fire? her powers, by testing something out while, she was checking out stuff cool stuff in a tube then, Zorbon (accidentally) pressed the wrong button, and it activated the power button which allows the person in the tube to have powers. Dar Fire? knew that, if she didn’t do anything about her powers, then she will end up harming everyone in her city, so she told Zorbon to help her control her powers.
What type of climate was Dark Fire? living in?
Well you see, Wendy was living in a kind of rich family, but sadly her parents passed away when she was 13 years old she had no siblings sadly but she still had her uncle with her. Ever since then, Wendy has been living a good life, until 2020. Her uncle had passed away, and she knew that she could do anything to save anyone.
All about her powers:
All of her powers are really cool, and they can stop a lot of things, such as a car crash, a falling bus or even people stealing from houses or cars and she can fight bad guys (if there even is any) also she can control the weather e.g if it’s a really beautiful day and it starts raining then she may stop that and carry on what she is doing and if she is late for school she can get dressed and teleport there.
Hope you all enjoyed reading all about my superhero keep washing your hands and stay safe!!?????????
Dear Mrs Avdiu, I uploaded my work about 2 hours ago. I hope you received it.
Have a nice afternoon!
Hi jeanne! Sorry I was busy setting blogs for next week and managing the Y5 and Y6 blogs. Thank you for your patience. Next time please let me know in the comments that you have sent it so that I can look for it as I don’t instantly receive notifications to let me know that a file has been uploaded 🙂
I really enjoyed reading your writing – I am so delighted to see your handwriting is still beautiful and your creativity just gets better and better. Well done, you should be very proud!
Good morning everyone, I hope that you are well and having a good day. This is my completed fact file.
Morph
Quick facts
Name: Thomas Suzuki
Superhero identity: Morph
Date of birth: June 2nd, 2007
Abilities: Telekinesis and the power to change anything (including himself) into something else
Early life
Thomas was born in Tokyo city and lived there with his parents until 2012 when his mum was killed by the mafia. He and his dad then moved to New York where his dad got a new job as a computer scientist.
How he got his powers
One day, Thomas was walking home from school when he tripped and fell into a hollow tree. Inside, a man with giant wings was sitting on a block of wood, holding a dying caterpillar. He told Thomas that when the caterpillar died, he would die too. He handed Thomas the caterpillar to look at, and at that instant, it died and Thomas felt a tingling sensation inside him. He found that if he concentrated on something, he could move it around just by thinking. He also realised that if he touched an object, it would turn into whatever he wanted it to.
Fighting evil
When Thomas got home that day, he knew that the first thing that he would do, was round up each country’s mafia and avenge his mother. Then, he would look for other prohibited gangs and black markets. So far, he has shattered 36 criminal organisations, 27 mafias, 46 illegal trade markets and 120 individuals caught poaching, smuggling, assassinating, or terrorising.
Did you know?
When Thomas isn’t either at school or fighting crime, he usually spends his time moving and changing objects for fun.
Super work Zavan! This sounds like it would make an excellent action-packed film!!!
Thanks for sharing your writing Gabi! Thank you for your patience – it is now on the blog. Next time please let me know in the comments that you have sent it so that I can look for it as I don’t instantly receive notifications to let me know that a file has been uploaded ?
I really like that you used a real life person as a superhero and you’ve included some valid points which really show how much of a superhero she is! Well done 🙂