English Task
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This week we continued reading the text ‘Bear and Rabbit.’ You have practised your punctuation skills and corrected lots of sentences. Today you will have the opportunity to apply these skills to your writing.
Today’s English focus is:
Writing
Today is an opportunity to write and share your first paragraph of writing. Write your first paragraph in your yellow book and then type this up on the blog. I will give you feedback on your writing so far.
You can continue your writing in your yellow books. Once you have finished, read over and edit your work.
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Tomorrow, a new blog will be posted for you to share your finished pieces. You may like to write this in your best handwriting with all of the corrections.
You can send a photo tomorrow of your finished writing pieces and I will add them to the gallery in tomorrow’s writing blog.
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Task
Skill: To continue writing a story.
You may like to read over the text again HERE to remind yourself of the events that happened.
Top Tips
Look at the story structure for some help. As we are not writing the whole story, I have highlighted important parts to include in yellow below.
Checklist
-Paragraphs (follow the structure in the top tips!)
-Punctuation & Spelling – keep reading over your work regularly.
-Detail – the more detail and description you use, the more interesting your story will be! Look at the story ingredients above.
Support
You might like to plan your writing first by jotting down some ideas before you start writing your story. Click HERE for a story plan (you don’t need to fill in the beginning box on the plan).
Word bank
Sentence openers
Hello Miss
I have a question on the book : I can only see 37 pages and not 45 in the pdf, are there some missing ?
thanks
Hi Penelope, On the PDF there are some pages where there are two on one page. Just go to the last page on the PDF, that is pages 45 🙂
They followed Castor around the bend. Just where their stream usually flowed into the lake, it was blocked by a dam made of trees. Very familiar trees… There were lots of trees laid near the lake.”But it’s to make a bridge so that animals can easily cross the lake” said Castor. “But our honey tree and our nest ? ” said Woodpecker . “Well listen, I know these were your favourite trees, but I had no choice, these were the only trees I could find.” said Castor
A good start Penelope, well done for using the correct punctuation too. Think carefully about what might happen next, will they encounter a problem?!
They followed castor around the bend. Just where their stream usually lowed into the lake, it was blocked, by a dam made of trees. Very familiar trees…….
Bear and rabbit gasped. They were horrified at what they seen. Beaver explained that he was building a dam, to separate the land and water, to create a village for beavers. Bear rubbed his head, “that doesn’t sound so bad” he said. Rabbit couldn’t believe his ears! “What do you mean, not so bad, it couldn’t get any worse”.
Beaver offered them both a job. He needed bear to move the heavy logs. Rabbit was going to be the architect. He needed his help to plan the village.
Beaver said “ I will gather up all the sampling I can find to replace the trees, how does that sound?”
Rabbit smiled the biggest, toothiest, grin you could ever see!
They followed Castor around the bend. Just where their stream usually flowed into the lake, it was blocked by a dam of trees. Very familiar trees…”Why did you move our stream Castor?”, they asked. “I did not move your stream! It’s all about progress! Newer, bigger and better!” said Castor. “ It’s all about ENGINEERING!!” “WHAT DO YOU MEAN?!“ asked Rabbit. “Are you putting an engine in our stream?” added Woodpecker. “Of course not you brainless feathered thing!” “I’m no brainless feathered thing of what you speak of. I’m a wood wood woodpecker!” “Engineering is about progress!” He waved at the wide stream. “See?” “But what does progress have to do with our missing trees?!” asked Bear. “Oh nothing much” replied Castor “just flood your valley about this high” he lifted his paw slightly higher than Rabbit and Woodpecker. “The stream will come in my house and over my head!!” said Rabbit with horror. “Yes” said Castor, after crunching a few more trees,” if I do it right which I’m sure of!”
To be continued…
Superb effort Ethan, you have thought through your ideas of what happens next very carefully and I can see you have read over your work. I am looking forward to finding out about how the village turned out tomorrow 🙂
Excellent effort Celestine, you have included lots of detail in your writing by adding in lots of direct speech between the characters!
I like the humour you added in too. Check over your punctuation to ensure it is all correct 🙂
A great start Sebastian, I like how they pushed Castor into the lake! As you continue your writing, you can build in lots of suspense by writing about what happens to Castor!
A good start Louis, remember to use inverted commas when you are using direct speech. As you continue your writing, think about adding in some detail about how the characters were feeling.
Castor said (pointing his finger towards all the trees they could see): ,,Can you see all of these trees? We will need all of them for our dam!” We simply could not believe our own eyes! Rabbit was nearly crying, but after a while he whispered into my ear: ”We need to do something o stop this, or our home will be gone.” ”But what can we do?” I asked. Then Rabbit whispered: ”I have a plan –”
A good start Helena! Good girl for using lots of direct speech to make your writing interesting. I am glad Rabbit has a plan! As you continue writing, remember to include some description too. I am looking forward to reading your finished piece tomorrow.
hi miss Jones I found today’s work not that hard
A good start Johnny, well done. I wonder what the weird noise could be?! As you continue writing, remember to include some direct speech too, this will make your writing interesting.
They followed Castor round the bend . Just where the river usually flowed to the lake, it was blocked by trees. Very familiar trees ..
Rabbit and Bear were shocked. They had never seen anything like it before. Beaver said ‘we’re making a town for beavers on the other side. We need lots of helpers. Do you want to help?’ Rabbit and Bear said ‘OK what shall we do?’ Beaver replied ‘Bear you can help us knock down some of the trees and pick some up and help us. Rabbit you can tell Bear what trees to cut and where to put them’.
A great start Holly, you have thought through your sentences carefully, well done! I am looking forward to reading your finished piece tomorrow. Don’t forget to include description in your writing – include how the characters are feeling too.
They followed Castor around the bend. Just where their stream usually flowed into the lake , it was blocked by trees. Very familiar trees… Rabbit and bear were shocked by what they were seeing.Wood Pecker got very angry and said”you’re destroying all our beautiful trees where are the animals going to live?”Beaver explained he was making a house for his family and he asked for help.Bear was delighted to help but rabbit wasn’t so sure,please begged Beaver for my family………..
A good start Ophelia, your sentences are clear and you have some good ideas! Remember to include inverted commas throughout your writing, check the last line 🙂
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They followed Castor around the bend. Just where their stream usually flowed into the lake, it was blocked by a dam made of trees. Very familiar trees. Then everyone noticed it was all of their trees everyone complained but Castor said ” you silly animals this is to make the lake bigger and better. ” Everybody thought that the dam was a good idea when Castor said that. After Castor said how engineering worked everyone started asking if Castor could build a house for woodpecker whitch was bigger and better so he did he made a nice tall bird house. Everybody was amazed of Castors masterpiece and how fast he did it and Castor noticed that so Castor asked if they wanted to help him make better stuff and soon with everyone helping Castor,the woods were almost like a town.
A great start Chloe K, you have a good storyline! I like your word ‘masterpiece!’
As you continue writing, remember to discuss the feelings of the characters, what were they thinking with the new house? Were there any problems that they encountered?
They followed Castor around the bend.Just where their stream usually flowed into the lake, it was blocked, by a dam made of trees.Very familiar trees like Bears favourite scratching tree,the honey bee tree and last but not least Woodpecker tree.” So Cartor how many trees are you going to need”asked Bear “we do not know”said Castor “Wait , what you mean We” said Woodpecker.Suddnaly they heard a voice”Sir l think we need 28 trees” said another beaver, “who is that” ,asked Rabbit puzzled “who, oh that is Raven one of my helpers”answered Castor “but did Raven just say that 28 trees have to be cut down from our forest “whispered Rabbit to the Bear “yes he said that,28 trees have to be cut down”whispered Bear to Rabbit.”Isn’t it that great about our new progress”said Castor “NO, IT’S NOT GREAT CASTOR”shouted Bear,Rabbit and Woodpecker all together angrily.
Although they started arguing about cutting down 28 trees rather than discussing it.
Then they stared to calm down,then a nother beaver came shouting “we have a very bad problem Sir!” it said “let me guess it is another helper “said Woodpecker.”yes it is a another helper her name is Alina”said Castor,”what is the very bad problem Alina”asked Castor.
to be continued
Super effort Karolina, you have some great ideas! Well done for adding extra details to your sentences to show how the characters were feeling. As you continue, remember to read over and keep checking your punctuation. Don’t forget to include full stops or commas where you are using inverted commas.
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They follow castor or around the bend. Just where the stream usually flowed into the lake, it was blocked by Dam made of trees. Very familiar trees. ” I think we’re in the dark forest cried Rabbit”. Woodpecker and the Rabbit were terrified but Bear was calm. Woodpecker said ”I think it’s time to go”. ”You’re just a scaredy-cat!” loudly cried Bear. ”Who me?A scaredy-cat?” Ferociously screamed Rabbit. ”No not you Woodpecker!!!” Answered Bear. ”How dare you!!!” Woodpecker shouted loudly. Do you animals are stupidly crazy whispered Beaver.
‘They followed Castor around the bend. Just where their stream usually flowed into the lake,it was blocked, by a dam made of trees,very familiar trees..’
“There’s my scratching tree”, shouted bear. ” There’s my house “, yelled woodpecker. Both were very unhappy and confused.
“I had to Engineer a dam so we don’t get flooded”, Explained Castor.
Too much water will over flow, so the trees help stop it coming.
Well done for your first paragraph Jiana, you have included lots of direct speech. Remember to include some description about the setting too.
Great start Chloe H! I love your choice of words especially ‘ferociously!’
When you use inverted commas remember to insert your punctuation mark before closing the inverted commas – for example “I think we’re in the dark forest,” cried Rabbit.
I think Bear and rabbit get lost in a huge forest and they are stuck.
They followed Castor around the bend. Just where their stream usually flowed into the lake,it was blocked by a dam made of trees. “Very familiar trees” said Castor. Bear and rabbit followed Castor and saw some mysterious things. “What is this?”asked bear. Castor said oh don’t touch that. That is poisen. Bear said where are we going Castor? Castor said just follow me. Rabbit said are you sure you know we’re you are going. Castor said we will be alright just wait and see.
Bear,rabbit and Castor heared a “rumble” and bang.” What was that?”asked Castor. “I don’t know “said bear and rabbit.
Miss that is my story I will Finnish it tomorrow.
Great effort Gabriella! You have some creative ideas so far. As you continue writing, remember to add in the inverted commas when someone is speaking 🙂
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I think the story is about Rabbit is going to become brave and find the trees .
They followed Castor around the bend, just where their stream usually flowed into the lake, by a dam made of trees. Very familiar trees .. Rabbit said “ wait a minute is the the tree from the forest”! They ran and chased the the trees and the trees began to move and move. It came to the edge of the soft, white lake. So they found a stable it was a dark, cold and smelly stable. They looked for the rope and woodpecker found it. They ran to the lake and grabbed the trees, they saved the Forest!
Great effort Graceanne! I like how the trees started to move in your story! Remember to read over and check your punctuation is correct.
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They followed Castor around the bend. Just where their stream usually flowed into the lake, it was blocked, by a dam made of trees. Very familiar trees. They saw Bear’s favorite scratching tree, Honey Bee Tree, Woodpecker’s Tree…”That’s disgusting! Where am I going to scratch my soft hairy back and get yummy hunny for breakfast?” Bear roared ferociously and stamped menacingly. “My nest! My nest! I have nowhere to live!” whimpered Woodpecker. “It sounds terrifying to have my lovely Cody burrow on the lovely side on the stream! How can I get there?” screamed Rabbit and leapt backwards and forwards. “Calm down! Calm down! Worrying doesn’t fix things, dose it? declared progressive Engineer Castor . “I would like to make your life newer and better, and your world bigger and more interesting and exiting.” Castor went on. “I’m sure only Progress and YOU can make it true” “How can it be?” cried Bear, Rabbit and Woodpecker slightly wondering. To be continued.
They followed Castor around the bend. Just where their stream usually flowed into the lake, it was blocked by a dam made of trees. Very familiar trees… There were lots of trees laid near the lake.”But it’s to make a bridge so that animals can easily cross the lake” said Castor. “But our honey tree and our nest ? ” said Woodpecker . “Well listen, I know these were your favourite trees, but I had no choice, these were the only trees I could find.” said Castor.
“But don’t worry, just follow me and you will see”. On the other side of the lake were honey bee trees, nests and lots of other things. “Waouh this is wonderful. Thank you Castor.” said Rabbit, Bear and Woodpecker. And so they decided to all move here and they thanked Castor for having found such a wonderful place for them to live in . And they lived happily ever after .