Good morning Class 1!
I am excited because on Thursdays we start our writing which means I get to read more of your super sentences today!
Your task today is to write a diary entry! You are going to imagine that you are Tom travelling to the North Pole. Read the blog carefully to remind you of all of the features of a diary entry…
There’s a lot to remember!
I think you can do it though!
Remember, today’s blog is a chance for you to plan your diary or write the first part. I can then give you some feedback before you write the final version ready to be published on tomorrow’s blog!
This is your last piece of work on The Great Explorer so try your very best to make this the most amazing piece of writing you have ever done!
Writing lots can get very tiring so take regular breaks if you start to get tired and come back to your writing a bit later!
You might want to plan your writing and send a picture of your plan in for feedback. You can do this by drawing your own plan (an example is below) or by printing out the example here: Diary Plan
I can’t wait to see your wonderful writing! Don’t forget to check back to see the features of a diary entry to make sure you use them all!
From Miss Lee 🙂
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A great plan Basile, thank you for sending it in!
You have used the word ‘I’ and you have added lots of feelings. I can also see that you have written your plan in the past tense. Great work!
When you come to writing your diary, check North Pole has capital letters because it is the name of a place. When you write your sentences, challenge yourself to use time connectives such as ‘next’ or ‘first’ to link your sentences together.
Dear Miss Lee,
Thursday 18th June 8PM
Dear Diary,
Today is my second day in the North Pole. I felt very cold all day even though I was wearing my warm winter clothing. I made a warm cup of cocoa and it made me a bit warmer and happy. I fished and caught salmon. I lit a fire and cooked the salmon on it with rice. I saw so many polar bears that I couldn’t even count them because they were camouflaged in the snow! They looked very beautiful, but scary. I shivered because it snowed. I felt very worried because I didn’t find my daddy. Hopefully I will find him tomorrow. I am going to bed now.
Hello Saoirse!
Well done for writing a brilliant diary entry! You have written in the past tense and included lots of feelings!
For tomorrow, see if you can add some time connectives to the begining of your sentences. For example:
‘First I made a warm cup of cocoa.’
Dear Miss Lee.
I have written out my diary entry and emailed it to you.
I will also type it here.
The Great Explorer Diary.
Dear Diary
When I woke up this morning I got out of my tent and went fishing for my breakfast and set off for my trip. I felt really excited about what I might see.
In the afternoon a Polar bear came up to me . It was really angry so I ran away. I was really scared.
In the evening I saw my dad. He had broken his leg. I tried to get help. Fortunately someone came and when we got home we celebrated.
I felt like I had an exciting day and I felt proud for saving my dad.
Hello Isabella!
Thank you for sending in your work, beautiful writing!
Well done for writing in the past tense and for including your feelings.
Can you use some more time connectives in your writing, for example ‘first’ or ‘next’ to vary your sentence openers further?
Hello Camila,
I read your diary plan, it looks great! I can tell it is going to be a brilliant diary entry! You writing was so neat too!
When you write your diary today, see if you can use lots of time connectives such as ‘first’ and ‘next’ to link all of the parts of the day together.
Hello Laura!
I read your first draft of your diary!
It sounds great! You have written in the past tense and included everything about Tom’s adventure to the North Pole to save his dad!
When you write your final version today, can you include some more of Tom’s feelings? For example how did he feel when he was in the hot air balloon?
Hello Mateus!
I read you diary plan!
I think it is going to be a very exciting diary entry to read!
You have included some great ideas!
When you write the diary today, make sure you link your feelings to each event. So when you write about the polar bear, describe how you felt when you saw it.
I can’t wait to read it!